"Who notices their enemy's eye colour when fighting?" Sounds like the beginning of an "enemies to lovers" situation.
@bulletanarchy6447
Жыл бұрын
Who notices the colour of some's eyes until they have had sex at least ten times ?
@miramari732
2 жыл бұрын
With broken ribbs (or any major broken bones) - a little clarification. Your character can get up if they are really adrenaline pumped (source: paramedic friend and his car crash calls stories), but adrenaline rush is short. It will be over and character will colapse. And also, in that much of adrenaline rush character won't be able act or think logically and most likely won't fight - instead is more prone to flight reaction.
@midnight8341
2 жыл бұрын
In a normal car crash, yes. In a true life or death fight, you are able to go on. Your body can release a morphine derivative that's eight times stronger than actual morphine, which means you can practically feel no pain. But you stay alert. People have amputated their own arm under the influence of that drug and walked miles through the dessert with a shirt-wrapped bleeding stump. And they survived. If threatened by an enemy, the human body can develop amazing automations, which can keep you alive for a long time. Not days, but it can last hours.
@ttchme9816
Жыл бұрын
You haven't seen a fight before. I saw people getting stabbed like 4 times in their abdomen and is still fighting, only collapsing after the fight ended. If you don't believe me just read some news.
@vlmerkiel
7 ай бұрын
Hi! I'm a nurse, and it's actually quite amazing what a person can do when their adrenaline is going full force. If they're in a life or death situation--especially if they're protecting someone they love--they actually *can* get back up and fight, even with the most severe of injuries, like broken ribs. Adrenaline blunts your pain sensors, so it's not usually until after the fight's over that it really sinks in just *how much* pain you're in. (I will add a caveat though: If that rib has punctured a lung, then it's absolutely game over.)
@BioniclesaurKing4t2
2 жыл бұрын
"Who notices the color of someone's eyes when they're in a life or death situation?" Well, if the enemy you're facing has three of them…and they're glowing red spotlights shining out of their face…your attention miiiight just be drawn there, at least once. There are answers to all of these "but why?" questions, most of them involving "none of my characters look like humans and they all have superpowers, it's just my genre". Plus, it's always fun to hear "don't do this" advice and invent a niche scenario where it would actually work in context; writing isn't about not breaking the rules, but about knowing when to break them and how, that's how things are made interesting.
@AchillesKillies
2 жыл бұрын
Jenna is a magical mind reader that uses her mind reading to help struggling writers. What a queen. 👑
@lydierayn
2 жыл бұрын
Magical mind reading android
@ludovico6890
2 жыл бұрын
I write crime fiction so I write a fairly high number of action scenes, mainly fisticuffs and shootouts. My advices: keep them short(ish), take time to introduce them and build suspence and always, always, always keep into account the surroundings. Oh and when it comes to guns: remember these things are noisy. Even with a suppressor.
@warriormaiden9829
2 жыл бұрын
Ammo size is important. Never get into a gunfight with a caliber that starts with anything less than 4. And the heavier the gun, the smaller the kick. My P938 kicks more than my husband's P226, even when both have full clips. Also, snap caps are a great thing to have on hand for after the fight. It's a great way to protect the firing pin as a lot of guns nowadays have to have the whole slide replaced if that sucker breaks.
@ludovico6890
2 жыл бұрын
@@warriormaiden9829 Thanks for the info. I tend to avoid getting technical (not knowing much about firearms and not wanting to get bogged down in details), but I try to remain authentic. My MC uses a Glock, the standard service weapon of the police force he used to belong to. The badguys use whatever they can find or, if I know them, the brands they use in real life (the mafia and the bikers tend to have different weaponry and MO for instance).
@warriormaiden9829
2 жыл бұрын
@@ludovico6890 Nice!
@ludovico6890
2 жыл бұрын
@@warriormaiden9829 Thanks. I think it comes off as believable.
@the_sky_is_blue_and_so_am_I
2 жыл бұрын
@@ludovico6890 It does
@jaycren6888
2 жыл бұрын
Quick tip for that last one. One of my MCs can ignore pain and his physical limitations. But I also write about the aftermath. Ignoring those things are inherently dangerous. I periodically give him a quiet moment for the toll this ability takes on his body. He shivers and cries and often seems to be in worse shape then those he opposed. Yet he always pulls himself up and is ready for what comes next. His confidence and arrogance are as much defenses as they are weapons. Because they conceal how destroyed he actually is.
@surgeorosgo
Жыл бұрын
That MC sounds complex and I'm very intrigued by him and what story he is in. I'm a beginner novelist myself and I'm trying to meet other writers and learn from them. I would love to be a beta reader for this project or any other project if you would like one.
@Herbidieheilige
2 жыл бұрын
Wow, what timing! This comes out just as I finish an action heavy scene/chapter. This will help with the rest of my book too. Gotta love ya, Jenna.
@albertdiaz3631
2 жыл бұрын
Sounds great ! If you’re facing any problems with your book writing project I think you can view my channel description for assistance
@dreamecks
2 жыл бұрын
What’s your book called?
@HarukaBlossom101
2 жыл бұрын
@@dreamecks I don't think it's out yet-
@dreamecks
2 жыл бұрын
@@HarukaBlossom101🐒
@HarukaBlossom101
2 жыл бұрын
But if it’s out, spill the tea lmao 💀
@maximk9964
2 жыл бұрын
Than you for this advice. I definitely have tendency to over-describe things, especially in action.
@albertdiaz3631
2 жыл бұрын
Great! Need any assistance?
@ludovico6890
2 жыл бұрын
It's a fine line. You don't want to be too telegraphic, but you want it to remain dynamic. My advice: reserves the detailed descriptions for before and after. It allows you to build atmosphere and create suspense, as well as setting the stakes.
@AshNight1214
2 жыл бұрын
I'm so glad I've been critiquing right for action scenes! If I could add to the "get in your body" part, it's also a good thing to get into OTHER people's body. People feel things differently, so if you can vary the physicality from character to character, it keeps readers from noticing the lack of difference between them (even between books!). This also goes for things like nervous tics and habits. It drives me nuts when I can tell how the writer reacts to certain things because ALL OF THEIR CHARACTERS do the same thing.
@thepokemonprofessor1650
2 жыл бұрын
I’ve struggled with action and mostly fight scenes so thanks. I think my favorite thing to do is have two characters team up in a fight so we can bounce their powers and personalities off each other, and also finding g some badass ways for characters to use powers in unexpected ways
@rzuue
2 жыл бұрын
I sometimes wonder why broken limbs often get described like “oh well, might be broken” I once just got a slight crack in my toe (bone) and it hurt so fckng much and it wasn’t even really broken. It took a bit until I felt it due to shock, but then it was really really painful.
@iferawhite7661
2 жыл бұрын
In a fight (where your life might be at stake, anyway), your body delivers adrenaline and a sort of morphine to keep you fighting and not screaming in pain and whining like a little baby. So although I've never been in such a fight, I can imagine when you're in that kind of fight, you might not be able to tell something is broken until after the fight is over. Outside of a fight/running for your life scene then yeah, you're right. It should hurt badly unless the character has a nerve disorder or some other insensitivity
@rzuue
2 жыл бұрын
@@iferawhite7661 well, I’m not necessarily talking about during a fight. It’s also often the case afterwards. I feel like some authors try to show how badass their characters are by making them not feel much pain when something is broken
@iferawhite7661
2 жыл бұрын
@@rzuue True, usually they should feel the pain within 30 minutes or so of the fight. I actually have a character who plays on this idea; he has a nerve disorder which causes him to feel no/very little pain even when he breaks something. As a result, rather than being "badass" he just keeps doing whatever he's doing until he physically cannot move, makes an idiot of himself, and ends up incapacitated until all the wounds heal (and gets lectures about how he's supposed to be checking himself for blood, fractures, etc instead of just ignoring injuries because they only feel like a pinch to him) It's a lot of fun to use this in a sort of satirical way, but I despise it when it's used unironically. There's nothing badass about ignoring your injuries.
@adde9506
2 жыл бұрын
Had a broken rib once. I felt it pop but couldn't go to a doctor for three weeks. I didn't have any problem chopping wood or throwing axes, but cross-sawing was a no go. It hurt, but I only knew it was broken because I felt (and heard) it break; it wasn't all that bad. If I'd been fighting for my life at the time, I probably wouldn't have noticed it at all.
@dueling_spectra7270
2 жыл бұрын
Everybody's pain tolerance is set to a different level. This year I spent a lot of time around three people who suffer from the same autoimmune disease that's characterized by flare ups of painful inflammation during times of bad weather. We also had way more rain than normal. The 60 yr old lady: you wouldn't know she's in suffering, unless she's told you that her continual habit of sighing continually is her breathing through the pain. The 50 yr old man: on bad days, he would groan, maybe slow down a bit and his gate might take on more of a shuffle, but was still pretty hardcore about pushing through. His tell was his concentration would faulter. The 20ish yr old kid: he would move like an eighty year old man, and be doubled over in agony. Watching him, made me appreciate the skills the other two had developed over their lives: How to manage pain How to push through it How to not bite off the heads of hapless idiots on days when your patience for fools in nonexistent because your brain's too busy filtering your pain to contain that snarky inner voice. For our characters, how much experience would they have had with pain, sickness, or injury? Are they good patients? Does the doctor have to threaten them to keep them in bed? Do they become unusually whiney or irritabile?
@The_Leftysaurus
2 жыл бұрын
snorting like a toddler at 'knowing when to show and when to grow' 🙈 but yaaaaaaaay~ Mainly love the powerful verbs! Such a good skill to hone
@fishysc0okielife
2 жыл бұрын
I just realized that this comment is apparently two days old and the video is less than an hour old *Confused screaming*
@The_Leftysaurus
2 жыл бұрын
@@fishysc0okielife I'm a patron and get early access~ Join the revelry at Cyborg Central~
@durendalarcas8209
2 жыл бұрын
Been watching your videos for some time now. Every morning with my coffee. I found them to be extremely helpful and entertaining. I was hesitant to buy your books because romance is not my cup of tea... But, my wife has asked me to write a romance story for her. So I went ahead and bought books 1 and 2. To learn from a master. Thanks! :)
@krk_mnst
2 жыл бұрын
I actually jotted down how to do my style of fight scenes, but this make it even better! Thank you so much for doing this
@albertdiaz3631
2 жыл бұрын
I think that’s one of the simplest things and I can help you with a talented writer view my channel description for help
@malindashumpert7956
2 жыл бұрын
This is what I've been waiting for. Thank you for uploading this and you're a mind reader, Jenna! Thank you!
@istherelifeon
2 жыл бұрын
I have a love-hate relationship with writing fight scenes. Love them but they're HARD haha
@mochisprite9779
2 жыл бұрын
wtf, I was just thinking I needed to learn how to write action scenes and this pops up as I go to search for a video... THANK YOU JENNA!!
@ASyler
2 жыл бұрын
Great advice! Thank you for the video... been working on some action scenes. There's always that fine line of overdoing it when you're in the trenches for sure.
@meganthompson6676
2 жыл бұрын
Can I request a video about the best and worst reviews you've had for your books, Jenna?
@akuma_killereva3683
2 жыл бұрын
I NEEDED THIS! Thank you!
@stews9
2 жыл бұрын
One cavil - when reaching for better verbs, some enter into the Purple Reign of Excess. Fancier ain't necessarily better, and verbs prove this most starkly. "He defenestrated her," is kinda absurd, while the basic, "She threw him out the window," remains a vivid image. Tossed? Well ... on the weak side. Hurled might work or might evoke puking. Anyway, great stuff, as usual, Jenna.
@KnightofEkron
2 жыл бұрын
Thank you so much this channel. I've been creating a story for over 15 years, cobbled together from dreams into a somewhat coherent story and now I'm thinking of genuinely writing it, your videos have helped a lot.
@Skaramine
2 жыл бұрын
I’ve been writing Mack Bolan, the Executioner novels since 1999 (to 2016) and I am feeling better about some things, and STILL learning on others (oh lord the weaponry info dump) . I’m so glad I found your channel.
@davidbasinski2634
2 жыл бұрын
Read a detective novel like Lee Child's Reacher to see how the pros do it. Or Battle Royal, the book Hunger Games was based upon.
@MattyParker
2 жыл бұрын
Great tips as always, Jenna!
@TheDukeofMadness
2 жыл бұрын
This is a video I've needed. I can do dialogue but can't do action. Thank you, again, talented lady.
@ultimatefangirl5718
2 жыл бұрын
Exactly what I needed, thanks Jenna💖
@InvisiblerApple
2 жыл бұрын
I've mentioned Animorphs here before, but it's what came to mind on point 9. The morphing ability gives them straight up superpowers, and it gets them out of outright lethal situations. But it's still severely incapacitating and the limitations of the morphing power create some equally hazardous circumstances. Book 54, anyone?
@emmapierskalla7622
2 жыл бұрын
Tobleila IS my OTP! Love to listen to the audiobook version of both TSA & TSC at night before bed. Also this is why I love writing, simply changing a word can change a whole scene. And a vulnerable character is the best character...just read one where the prospect of dying had the character hurling.😍😍
@macraboscratos
2 жыл бұрын
I've been wanting for this
@tawnyalyons1891
2 жыл бұрын
I look forward to your videos everyweek. Been working on a book of my own and when I am unsure of anything I just ask myself (WWJD) What would Jenna do?
@ЛераСікорська
2 жыл бұрын
Watching this as a Ukrainian refugee, knowing that you've helped my country is great, thank you 🥺
@jackkn.killington5814
2 жыл бұрын
Congrats on the acclaim. I haven't read your books yet, but I have read Great Love. After I am done reading some Witcher books, I am tot's gonna start on yours.
@Writergal1
2 жыл бұрын
Yes! I needed thiss
@nerdthatcantfit1079
9 ай бұрын
A rule I’ve followed (and this rule has lead to ppl complimenting my action scenes) is to never ever repeat a “big action” if at all possible as in, if someone punches someone in the face. They shouldn’t do that exact action again. It forces me to get creative with my action scenes and it obviously stops them from being repetitive. Obviously I repeat words like “punch” or “run” or so on but if two ppl are in a fist fight I won’t have one of them out the other in a head lock in the exact same way. It may happen multiple times, but the difference would be in how it happens.
@triciacook6039
2 жыл бұрын
Thank you so much!
@lethalprincess2087
2 жыл бұрын
10:48 Totally agree. Either it's a near-death experience or they get revelation, or some sort of ah-ha moment on how they could possibly make it out with a few scrapes and their lives. Ya know?
@weinzyamparado9322
2 ай бұрын
10:50 i will say though, adding an internal momologue in a fight scene makes it much sadder. For example, hamilton. The song "The World Was Wide Enough" is a fast-paced, anger filled song for aaron burr. Then at the bridge, Hamilton monologues in his mind Part 1 is his stress: I see it coming do i run or fire my gun or let it be? Part 2 is his optimism and wanting to say goodbye Laurens leads the soldiers chorus on the other side, my son is on the other side, hes with my mother on the other side, washington is watching from the other side, Teach me how to say goodbye Part3 is for Eliza Eliza, my love take your time Then finally, acceptance Raise a glass to freedom
@Henbot
27 күн бұрын
It’s funny the point about invincibility. It’s interesting but in anime it’s an opposite trend when people get more invested in a overpowered MC from the start and then seeing how they are challenged
@unleashyourinnerwriter
2 жыл бұрын
Oh, these are great tips! I fell like I was writing great action scenes, you've just amped me up. I'm adding in some of those VERBS that I've been so afraid to use.
@lethalprincess2087
2 жыл бұрын
5:32 Did I ever tell you how much I love you as a KZitemr and writer? You are HILARIOUS 🤣🤣🤣
@fakecubed
Жыл бұрын
Talk to a combat veteran, or at least read some accounts. Plenty of them around. Understand the difference between a first experience with combat and somebody on their third tour who can tell from the sounds whether the artillery coming in is worth running to shelter over, or the enemy is still figuring out the range. And don't think that everyone just gets PTSD.
@frodo7287
2 ай бұрын
Of course someone already said this. The only other thing I would ask authors who are going to put anything military in their stories is learn how the military works. Nothing breaks my suspension of disbelief faster is an author who knows nothing about how the military works and didn't bother to research. Of course you can also tell the authors that were ex military
@lethalprincess2087
2 жыл бұрын
11:33 This can also be done in previous chapters. You don't need to wait up until that very moment to say what color the character's eyes is. I mean, unless it contributes to what the character is doing or is an effect of what the character has accomplished, then go ahead (maybe their eyes glow when they angry and tap into supernatural abilities, idk, or maybe their eyes light up when they complete an absurd life-like game level, idk 😂). But other than that, it's really not necessary unless it contributes to the plot.
@GuineaPig361
2 жыл бұрын
Exactly! I usually put most of my description at the beginning of a chapter to set the scene and do most of my info-dumping in the first five chapters, as that's the typical length of a first act in my stories.
@lethalprincess2087
2 жыл бұрын
@@GuineaPig361 Omg same!! I try to utilize the advantage of my first few chapters as a platform to really set the stage! It's good consolation for me though that you said that; validates the fact that it's okay for me to do that 😂😅
@GuineaPig361
2 жыл бұрын
@@lethalprincess2087 Thanks! I find it's easier to get all the exposition out of the way in the beginning so that I can focus on the characters and the plot.
@Anonymous-cn9ow
2 жыл бұрын
One very helpful video, I saw applies to quite a lot of fiction writing, that is crippling your protagonist. This adds tension to the fight scene and it gives the protagonist a new way to creatively solve the solution. One of the most famous examples of this is Superman and Kryptonite, and whilst it is pretty much a tradition to bash kryptonite as a lazy plot device to give the literal man of steel a weakness. But it can be a lot more than that, it could be a way to give nuance to a fight as Superman would have to rely on something that isn't his superpowers. Or on a front closer to home, I did something a little unique with this device even before I heard about it directly. In a story where one has to slay demons constantly, it is such a cliche for the protagonist to eventually turn into a demon and give him insane and downright overpowered abilities. But, instead, I made it more of a prohibitor and less of a 'power scaler'. It hinders him more than it helps him, now he has to fight another side of himself so he doesn't go insane and kill the innocent people around him. Granted he is still very strong (even without demon powers) but I wanted to do something unique with it. (sorry if it seems that I'm just tooting my own horn, I'm just sort of proud of myself and I don't get these opportunities often).
@erniexavier6369
2 жыл бұрын
The other thing about too many short sentences? Is it can, ironically, slows the action down. A period means this is the end of this idea. Pause now before going on to the next. If. There. Are. Too. Many. Pauses. It. Drags. Things. Out. Yes, a short sentence is punchy, but sometimes you need to break up those punches with a couple roundhouse kicks. Or at least a knee to the groin. That's always an audience favourite.
@PetrolJunkie
2 жыл бұрын
If my main character doesn't end up with physical and mental scars by the end I haven't finished editing the book yet. lol
@Cheesybreadwoman
2 жыл бұрын
Jenna you’re helping me so much with my book at this point that I might have to credit you as a co-author.
@pepinjessie6
2 жыл бұрын
I was wondering if you could make a video about your opinions on prologues? I recently watched a video about things publishers look for that said a prologue should be short or even non-existent because it takes readers out of the story. Some of my favorite books have prologues and I'd like to know if there's a universal rule to not do that?
@basikgirl9983
2 жыл бұрын
She made a video all about them a few years ago! I think she said it's pretty useful to have one.
@Lilitha11
2 жыл бұрын
You definitely want to avoid info dump prologues, however prologues are valid as long as they are important to the overall story and are entertaining. The bad rap that prologues get is often because they can contain lengthy setting details(ie info dumping) and it starts the story off very slowly.
@thepokemonprofessor1650
2 жыл бұрын
The history of the universe is important to understand for my book to make sense, so I have a shorter prologue at the beginning to explain it instead of it being the first chapter because none of the main characters have even been born and the end of the prologue
@Lilitha11
2 жыл бұрын
@@thepokemonprofessor1650 You should ask yourself, how much of it is important to know at the start of the book? While the history might be important, you might be able to fit a lot of it into the story later on, as a more natural part of the story. It isn't critical for people to know or understand everything at the start, as long as they have some grounding in the story and can relate to characters.
@cheeseisjar3058
2 жыл бұрын
I did a prologue from the POV of the overarching villain of my trilogy so set an ominous tone to the story and set up what will happen involving him near the end of the first book (no spoilers but it is pretty important). A lot of people liked it so I guess I did something right maybe.
@writethepath8354
2 жыл бұрын
Whew, forgot today was Wednesday! You're great at action scenes, even haters say so 😆
@adde9506
2 жыл бұрын
Normal humans CAN sustain very painful injuries during life-or-death struggles and only be vaguely aware of them until it is over. It's far more normal for a serious injury to lay someone out, but there are oodles of recorded cases of everyday people ignoring broken bones, bullet holes, and stab wounds... given the right motivation. Adrenaline is an amazing thing but doesn't last long; if they don't finish the fight in a few minutes, they're done one way or another. Mechanically destructive injuries are a different story. If your character's achilles tendon is cut, they cannot walk, regardless of what drugs they are on, how impressive their skills are, or how big the adrenaline rush is. Tendon ruptures often don't even hurt, but they are immediately debilitating. If you want your character to carry on through an injury, research if people have done it.
@lethalprincess2087
2 жыл бұрын
12:21 YESS THANK YOU QUEEN!!!
@l0ner204
2 жыл бұрын
I thought Jenna died 😭😭😭this is a nice surprise tho outta nowhere this pops up on my notifications, been a fan since 2020💜
@ActiveAdvocate1
2 жыл бұрын
I am a happy dolphin today, because I just got out of an hour-and-a-half meeting with my college's creative writing specialist. ABOUT MY BOOK. She's only read the first chapter, but she's liking it, and gave me some amazing feedback. WHEEE! Now then... 1. I'm going to attempt to focus on a very brief scene in my book where my anti-hero and hero are fist fighting. It doesn't last long, because Stephen (anti-hero) is the physical equivalent of overcooked spaghetti, but this scene is from his point of view. And yes, lots of short sentences, to the effect of, "Left hook, right hook, F*CK, I missed! Kick, he dodges. DAMMIT! Son of a bitch is mocking me!" He also swears a lot. Like...a lot. 2. Stephen also does a lot of out-loud yelling in this scene, so his spoken words also punctuate his interior monologue. And like I say, this scene is not long. One good shot to the gut, and he's on his back. I kind of DON'T feel sorry for him in this scene, in case that's not already clear, but this is where he STARTS TO START his transition from "I'm a bad guy but I suck at it" to "I'm at least a pitiable good guy". 3. Stephen's interior monologue in this scene is all tell, because he's literally thinking what he's doing. Like I say, "Left hook, right hook," and so forth, because he's not used to fighting, and he's up against someone who...okay, if Stephen is spaghetti, Jeremy's a brick wall. He's shorter but WAY bigger than Stephen, and he's had self-defence training, at least the rudimentary stuff. He knows what he's doing. So Stephen's struggle is very NEW to him, both in the sense of fighting at all, and in the sense of not being ABLE to fight like how he would want. He usually gets his way with his mouth, not his muscles. And frankly, since it's first-person, a lot of that is "tell" anyway. But not always. 4. MOST of the show in this scene is in facial expression, but there's also a large element of show when Jeremy inevitably puts Stephen on his back. I know it's mean of me, but I want my readers to be able to feel that pain in their own bodies. Ever had the wind knocked out of you? Depending on how it happens, it can be very visceral, because you're trying to feel the pain, and shut the pain out at the same time, but before that can even be experienced, your body panics because you can't breathe. That choking, jerking, struggling, desperate sense of "BREATHE!" is among the strongest "show" scenes in my book. 5. See above. His life is certainly not on the line, though. He insulted my Jeremy's dead father, and you don't push the dad button unless you want a knee in your gut. Quit literally, in this case. Jeremy is one of those people where his fuse could go from here to the sun and back, but, if, by some miracle of science, you get him angry, umm...run. 6. I imagine you want a lot of plosives (hard sounds) with this kind of thing, which is the reason why words like "slap", "grunt", and "slam" exist. There's almost onomatopoeic...and I did NOT spell that right on either my first or second attempt. But yeah, I have those. 7. Duh. I mean, this scene isn't just short because Jeremy hands him his ass: it's short because Stephen is, for once, NOT doing the twenty-page monologue thing. He's a very, very internal character, caught up in his own mind most of the time. Not here. 8. They're just fighting with their fists. in gym class. Because their gym teacher is one of those old-fashioned "I'll make a man out of you" types. So it's all perfectly legal and allowed. And that's pretty much the most stage-setting you get. 9. I don't think it's unrealistic that a dude with a weight class or two on you could hand you your ass, but this is why I don't write about a thing like, say, military violence. I'm out of my depth there. Guns go boom, people die. THAT'S ABOUT IT. Really, though, I'm a nonviolent person, so it's not my strong suit. 10. Yes mom...haha. Like i say, though, I REALLY don't feel bad for Stephen here. He had it coming. It' all worth it in the end anyway, because he does, eventually, clean up his act.
@surgeorosgo
Жыл бұрын
What is the point of the Book? I mean the plot?
@ActiveAdvocate1
Жыл бұрын
@@surgeorosgo, four main characters, all siblings, all POV character: Adam, Victoria, Stephen, Kayla. Very first scene, you find out Adam broke his spine getting hit y a car, so he's a wheelchair user now. The bulk of the book is about the plot surrounding the family's move cross-state (Florida), because, along with needing to get Adam into a more accessible school, their dad, this bigshot, asshole Southern Baptist pastor, also got a great deal to work at this big new megachurch. So they'd have to move anyway, but it's just in/convenient timing for Adam. Victoria, Adam's younger twin, falls in love with my series' hero, which she's NOT supposed o do, because he's Seminole Nation, and her family is SUPER racist .Stephen (antihero) has chronic depression and anxiety, and his plot is about him also kind of falling in love, but also about him learning to express himself in ways other than his father taught him, which are basically the equivalent of "Bully it until it does what you want, because you're rich, and he world ought to know it belongs to people like us." Kayla's plot is also about identity, because she's the youngest (just fourteen when the series starts), so, with her, a lot of it is about her developing capacity to get outside of her father's hyper-religious, hyper-strict little bubble of influence. Anti-ableist, anti-racist, anti-homophobic, and anti-religious-extremism narrative threads abound. What do you think: good synopsis?
@surgeorosgo
Жыл бұрын
@@ActiveAdvocate1 Very thorough. Not my cup of energy drink though. EDIT: I knew there was something specific that I wanted to say but I didn't know how to phrase it until just now. I don't have a problem with any of those "anti's" but if the WHOLE point of the book is about declaring how ANTI your characters are towards these things, it's not worth writing a whole book over. You could just post a tweet saying you're against all those things. The messages you want your readers to get needs to be subtle. That's all.
@ActiveAdvocate1
Жыл бұрын
@@surgeorosgo, no worries, because not everyone is going to like ANY book. I like George Orwell. I don't like Jane Austen. And my bestie thinks I'm nuts.
@surgeorosgo
Жыл бұрын
@@ActiveAdvocate1 I'm sorry for the late reply. I agree with you. No book will appeal to everyone. It's just impossible. I love Orwell and can tolerate Austen. My wife is the exact opposite.
@Phoenix5365
Жыл бұрын
If an opponent's eyes start glowing red or change to solid black, definitely take note.
@bb1886
2 жыл бұрын
Remember write what you know. If you need to write about a building blowing up, go blow a few of them that way you know what you are writing about. (Disclaimer: this advice is satire and the commenter accepts no responsibility for the actions of those reading)
@frodo7287
2 ай бұрын
You can also get your character shot, stabbed etc and keep going. This has happened many times in real life. It is usually after a battle that someone realizes "oh damn I was shot."
@chrimoram
2 жыл бұрын
how to write fist fighting during a fistfight in a story?
@DomesticatedGoth
Жыл бұрын
There's an entire novella that's someone trapped into a car sinking into a lake - 'Black Water' by Joyce Carol Oates. However, that's by *Joyce Carol Oates* who is exceptional at literary fiction. For the most part, dwelling too long doesn't work.
@miner_girl3989
2 жыл бұрын
I actually might use these
@rosarosas7982
2 жыл бұрын
Jenna:"obviously you dont want lengthy conversations, especially If there fighting for there lives. Mean while: Dragon ball z
@CandyThePuppy
2 жыл бұрын
11:20 tip: set all of this stuff up in previous chapters so you can have the best of BOTH worlds!
@ghostdreamer7272
2 жыл бұрын
Question: this series is supposed to be a trilogy, right? I haven't heard of any news at all of her writing a third book in a long time. Is it still happening, does anyone know? (And I know there's been a pandemic, and Jenna had personal stuff, I'm just honestly curious)
@theruintheruin337
2 жыл бұрын
Hmm.
@viggomares
2 жыл бұрын
Starts at 3:34
@chrissymandryka5562
2 жыл бұрын
What I love the most (very popular among some authors nowdays) is when the main character is injured but of course directly after a fight he sees a girl, gets errection and wants to fuck. This is a point when I put a book away...
@gamewrites
2 жыл бұрын
Love jenna
@axelwulf6220
Жыл бұрын
Violent Action scenes need to be abrupt and quick, not lingering on details unimportant at the time, specifying minor things with a short sentence or one broken up by commas. Use commas. They're your friend and your secret weapon...
@dueling_spectra7270
2 жыл бұрын
I've tried to describe how my character's broken rib feels, but the only thing I've broken is a toe... I feel like a break in the middle of your core would cause the nearby muscles and organs to feel affected too. When I googled it; the sources all handle it in a very sterile medical style.
@brettcarter5954
2 жыл бұрын
1. Hurry Up. An action scene is fast paced. that means short or medium sentences with variety. 2. Chop it up. Break up your action with short paragraphs. Avoid a wall of text. 3. It's okay to tell sometimes. Tell when showing is boring to the reader and creates a pacing problem. 4. Know when to show. Ex. An injury or explosion. Show how your character is feeling. 5. More of this stuff. How does the pain feel? 6. Slam, Crash, Pound, and Hurl. Chose verbs that give the reader a visceral reaction to the characters experience. 7. No one cares. Actions scenes are NOT the time to reflect or monologue. 8. STFU. Avoid info dumping in an action scene. 9. Make the readers believe it. Readers can only suspend disbelief but only to a certain point. Broken ribs are as painful as F*@K! The MC is not running away or fighting back unless they have Wolverine's (X-men) healing factor. 10. You're not fooling anyone. Power fantasies are understandable but the MC should not be indestructible and have unshackable confidence. Victories, unearned are unsatisfying.
@starryeyes999
2 жыл бұрын
100th like :D
@DarulFatih
2 жыл бұрын
BuT JeNnaa.....
@sleepinggorilla
8 ай бұрын
2024, there is a great short video on KZitem about why the MCU has lost believability. The example they give is Jeff Goldblum building a teleporter in his basement by himself. He failed a few times, had to outsource a lot of the parts, was on the short list for the Nobel prize in physics. Even he admits he does not fully understand what he has built. As opposers to Cassy Lang, an annoying teenager who built a Hubble telescope to the microscopic world in her basement without any help from her Grandpa.
@Kai77-24
2 жыл бұрын
You had me at, Action!
@patrickemeyer
2 жыл бұрын
For #8, my character is not used to fighting, but is being forced to, like kill or be killed. When given the chance to kill, they pause, staring at their opponents terrified face. Is this an okay time to describe in depth, or should I just keep going?
@surgeorosgo
Жыл бұрын
I think it is absolutely a great time to describe the opponent's facial features. It's in that moment of hesitation that the humanity of the opponent becomes real to the MC, allowing for the depth of murder to sink in and the MC has to decide if it's really worth it or not. Great question.
@tbnrrenagade9507
Жыл бұрын
You could actually use descriptions there to show character development as well. As the mc becomes more adapt at killing, the descriptions shorten before eventually disappearing (assuming that you want to go that route)
@DarthBiomech
2 жыл бұрын
10:25 Manga writers: "I'll pretend I didn't hear that!"
@corkandi
2 жыл бұрын
Thank you so much for this advice. I love your down to earth and direct presentation approach. I'm writing my first crime novel and watching your vid clip, I realise I need to make some adjustments to the action scenes. Do you use illustrations in your novels or prefer not to? I've subscribed.
@KaiMFS
2 жыл бұрын
HETEROCHROMIA! Hey I've got that!!! I appreciate the representation Jenna lol
@warriormaiden9829
2 жыл бұрын
Woo-hoo, a fellow heterochromatic! What's your type? I've got Central in blue/gold. Wound up being a trademark of my personal character designs. XD
@KaiMFS
2 жыл бұрын
@@warriormaiden9829 no way!! COOL! Blue/gold sounds gorgeous. I'm Central green w/gold. Do your eyes glow yellow in dim light too?
@CandyThePuppy
2 жыл бұрын
Broken ribs means game over? I mean... I've met some people before who tell me stories about times they broke bones including their ribs, but the adrenaline was so high they barely even noticed it!
@Erynus
2 жыл бұрын
You still can't walk with a broken leg, i mean mechanically, it doesn't work. The muscles can't support the weight, so no limping for 5 minutes and back into the fight. Also, broken ribs can puncture the lungs, and that is really game over no matter the adrenaline.
@hanshotfirst6488
2 жыл бұрын
Watching this leads me to believe Jenna Moreci as 0% experience at being a human.
@DY2727
2 жыл бұрын
I’m writing a crappy fanfic and well well well what have you post here
@warriormaiden9829
2 жыл бұрын
Lol, same. I've had several people say what I'm writing is great, but I still call it my awful obligatory self-insert. 🤣Because, let's face it, we've ALL written some sort of self-insert at some point. It's just that few of the good ones see the light of day. XD
@that_one_greek_dude
2 жыл бұрын
How to write characters readers love and hate at the same time.
@mark-ch2bx
2 жыл бұрын
Let's be honest, you are not as bad as some people mention and your content is to some extent beautiful,bit the book being considered one of the best of all times,wellll wat daf fak brooo
@valentinaistomina236
2 жыл бұрын
Felicidades, es un buen ejemplo. 495 sentadillas son unos XXXGIRLS.Uno muchas y un buen ejercicio. Se deja ver que hay muy buenos resultados 😍👍 Saludos desde la Cd.. de world 🌹😉💖 los mortalesl abian apreciado tan hermosa mujer.k
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