I'm sorry about the voice audio apparently being only in the left channel! I have no idea how I managed to mess that up, but I promise to make sure my mic is adjusted properly for future talking videos! Thank you to everyone letting me know (/gen/pos)❤❤
@Artsy_Turnip
18 күн бұрын
I'd actually like to know what Brokenstar and Yellowfang's relationship would be like when he was in thunderclan since he actually knows she's his mom in this rewrite :o
@ShmurplesArePurple
18 күн бұрын
@@Artsy_Turnip that would be super interesting actually! I didn't think much about it until I was actually exporting the finalized video, so I didn't do any theorizing in the video itself. It might change her reveal to fireheart a bit, but, I always felt that the more influential part about that scene was that she killed broken star, not that broken star was her son. Definitely would have some interesting dynamics, and I think it would be really cool to see how characters like fireheart feel about it since he's a son like character for her. It would also be interesting to see how blue star handles it.
@KaeserLooty
16 күн бұрын
my biggest issue with yellowfang's secret isn't the story per se, but the lack of agency from yellowfang, who is completely different from the one we know in the TPB. Ur rewrite makes a lot sense for her, bravo!
@riverheartx
17 күн бұрын
now THIS is a yellowfang I can truly love-a yellowfang that makes sense while still keeping the core of the character, and I also particularly love the cloudpaw/pelt moments. I’m gonna pretend that it’s allll canon now. you did a really great job with this rewrite and the artwork!!
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@riverheartx thank you sooooo much I'm so glad you liked what I changed!!! 💖💖💖
@Anamizuki
17 күн бұрын
Really good rewrite! If I'd change something, I'd make Brokentail/star ignoring hunting patrols into why the kits die so easily and why the elders are banished. And also the reason why Shadowclan becomes to aggressive as they start raiding other clans' camps for food.
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@Anamizuki oooo I really love that addition!!
@Anamizuki
16 күн бұрын
@@ShmurplesArePurple People often forget that fact. Shadow Clan is starving and Brokenstar is refusing to have hunters for some reason. So the only source of food must be what the warriors can steal from other clans.
@thedenimmenace
15 күн бұрын
Yeah, a fox totally stole the kittens and Brokenstar totally didn't kill them for fun...
@justasillykitty
16 күн бұрын
yellowfang’s secret (the original) made me unreasonably upset when i read it. i LOVE yellowfang (i mean, who doesn’t), but the way she seems to do a complete u-turn halfway through the book and doesn’t act like herself at all…it feels so wrong. plus her “power”. awesome rewrite, beautiful art…love this!! i think i would pay real actual money to buy your version as a book you’re just THAT COOL
@Nomders
17 күн бұрын
With brokentail training the kits early it could not only be he doesn't want the clan to be seen as weak but he thinks he is protecting them from internal threats in the clan like how he suspects his mother killed his sisters. At the same time however, if the kits die despite how much training they had its their fault, shouldnt be so weak, and yellowfang is the perfect scapegoat even outside the clan to cover off his mistakes and shift blame to as the kit killer. I mean, the guy had a pretty turbulent, inconsistent childhood even knowing yellowfang is his mother because of both parents, even though it wasn't all necessarily yellowfangs fault. He wants the clan to have structure and to be taken seriously, things he likely didnt have and goes way too overboard to he no longer knows his reasonings for things, he now just does such things because he wants to, theres finally some control in his life and he calls the shots. At least, that's my theory for this story, I love it, by the way.
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@Nomders oh my gosh this adds so much delectable depth to the AU I'm in love with your ideas!!
@Nomders
17 күн бұрын
I sat 'I mean the guy had a pretty shit turbulent' isn't a excuse for sending kittens to their deaths like I made it sounding like one. Whoops
@Nomders
17 күн бұрын
@@ShmurplesArePurple aw thanks, I was a bit nervous I didn't word it right but it's great to hear you like my take.
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@Nomders you worded it perfectly! It's super interesting💖
@SNUFFGURLL
8 күн бұрын
I really enjoy seeing the decline of Shadowclan through the rewrite, it's so tragic knowing that every step of the way, Yellowfang tried her best to help her clan but the power struggles and interpersonal dramas spun out of control.. You can see why she'd blame herself in the main series, because she wasn't able to dedicate enough time to helping Brokentail when he could've still been fixed, but you can also see how it's absolutely not her fault...
@Lu13s
17 күн бұрын
OMG thank you! I am reading the book right now. (Around the time Sagewhisker is telling Yellowfang that she needs to be a med) To me Yellowfang did a 180 mid book and it threw me in for a loop. And I think the rewrite was way better than the original
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@Lu13s TYSM!!! and yeah, it's alwayyyyyyssss frustrated me that she drops her entire life to choose a new career that she doesn't even seem to want 😭😭😭
@SkulkingSOB
13 күн бұрын
This rewrite is so good I'm just gonna headcanon it from now on - especially how you rewrote her starclan personality :)
@Marble_DrewASketch
16 күн бұрын
This is such a good rewrite to me, yellowfang’s super edition always felt me confused with about everything you covered. (like yellowfang’s ability to feel others pain) The super edition kinda reminds me of “Skyclan’s destiny” and how that felt me more frustrated then confused.
@paulalol4481
16 күн бұрын
Gosh, I hate when Warriors cats just adds plot points in súper editions, without really thinking of the plot holes they cause. This is especially tedious when it comes to medicine cats, because they ALWAYS need to be tragically forced into the medicine cat role. Great video, I like your re write!!!!
@jaistraw
16 күн бұрын
I loved this video. But in answer to the question at the end, there is one specific thing I might want to change/keep in this frankly awesome rewrite. When I was a kid reading Yellowfang's book, (which I think was actually the first ever warriors book I read that wasn't the manga-) I didn't exactly see Yellowfang's 'power' of physically feeling others' pain as.. well, a power. I always thought it was MTS- a rare condition that at the time I suspected I may have had. At some point, whether it was during or after reading I do not recall, I learned about MTS. "Mirror touch synesthesia". I think it might in fact have been directly because of the book that I found out about it, though I don't remember how exactly. Maybe I recognized my 'symptoms' in Yellowfang and did some googling. But either way, because of that it was something I really related to the character about! And one of the things I still remember, though it's been probably 10 years since I read it. MTS is a neurological condition, so I personally wouldn't feel comfortable taking away that part of the character, especially with how it was one of the things that allowed me to relate to said character. That's probably the one thing I would change! Or, I guess *keep* from the old version, but maybe portray in a less 'oohh magical' way- if indeed that was how it was portrayed in the book. Its been many years since I read it so I don't fully recall if it was haha! Edit: Yeah, after looking it up again the wiki states Yellowfang *does* have mirror touch synesthesia?? Not sure if this was confirmed or not though? So yeah no I definitely would want to keep that and maybe just portray it a little differently in the story. I certainly wouldn't consider it a 'superpower' really, it's a neurological condition and, at least in my experience, a disability that is still widely unknown or misunderstood by most people. One which is very personal in my case so the erasure if it would be a big no for me!
@BasilKats
12 күн бұрын
Very interesting rewrite. I like how you killed off Sagewhisker before making Yellowfang her apprentice and having it be Yellowfang's choice out of necessity, that's the one thing that would have fixed Yellowfang's secret for me. I think changing Starclan Yellowfang to value personal choice would have drastic consequences on the story via Leafpool's Wish as she's the one to (acting independently of Starclan) pull Squirrelflight into Leafpool's dream and lie to her about being barren and tell her to take the kits.
@bobbiepins3899
13 күн бұрын
I really enjoyed this rewrite, it makes much more sense. I remember reading yellowfangs secret and being so mad!!
@dredreadful4520
8 күн бұрын
Holy shit I love this Yellowfang rewrite. You did SUCH a good job!!!!!!
@Ucatty2
Күн бұрын
10/10 rewrite! What a fantastic thing to hear, a wonderful story to be told and retold!
@neptune430
17 күн бұрын
Oooo!!! I really like this take on a rewrite!! I have a rewrite/AU of mine which includes where Yellowfang’s kits all survive! (The first thing that had been established was Tigerstar’s sisters living and one of them replacing his place as an ambitious leader.)
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@neptune430 YOOO that's a super cool AU!!
@dontthreatanmewithagoosetime
17 күн бұрын
Ah what a treat! I loveeee warriors commentary and long form content. Love this rewrite, makes things just make more sense and tells a more compelling story!
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@dontthreatanmewithagoosetime TYSMMM💖💖
@decaying-lambX
20 күн бұрын
ITS SO GOOD RAAAAAAA
@ShmurplesArePurple
20 күн бұрын
@@decaying-lambX RAHHHHHH TYSM MAN I COULDN’T HAVE DONE THIS WITHOUT U TYSM FOR HELPING ME 💖💖💖💖💖
@Bloodiath
14 күн бұрын
I love how the rewrite you did portrays yellowfang! But I feel like it also tries to justify too much of what brokenstar did and also downplays how insanely brutal he was.
@kathryncoffey8961
8 күн бұрын
With Foxheart still alive in your rewrite, I can see an AU where she is part of the group that helps drive Brokenstar and his cronies out then promotes herself as leader. She picks Nightpelt as her deputy because he knows she has too many skeletons in her closet but is willing to keep his mouth if she grants him this position of authority. Because of his asthma, Foxheart figures Nightpelt might die anyway, and when that happens, she can pick a stronger candidate later. When she and Runningnose go to get the nine lives, Foxheart doesn't reach StarClan, but rather the Dark Forest. She meets Mapleshade, who offers a deal. If Foxheart can make ShadowClan the strongest clan there is, Mapleshade and other Dark Forest cats can grant her nine lives, regardless of what StarClan decrees. If she fails in this endeavor, Foxheart's soul will fight with Mapleshade's soul in a duel. Whichever soul wins will keep Foxheart's body while the other cat is condemned to the Dark Forest. She keeps this meeting a secret, even from her own medicine cat. Everything else plays out like it does in the books, only when ShadowClan gets hit with a greencough epidemic, she avoids sleep as much as possible, to avoid dueling with Mapleshade. Foxheart names Tigerclaw her deputy when she learns Nightpelt died. She tells him and Brokenstar's former allies when she dies to throw her body into a river rather than bury her in ShadowClan's burial grounds. When she eventually meets Mapleshade in the Dark Forest, Foxheart purposefully lets her win; however, Mapleshade gets quite a shock when she's already deep in the river and can't swim up to the surface in time, and thus dying as soon as she gets the new lease on life. Foxheart assumes herself the leader of the cats of the Dark Forest, at least until Tigerstar enters.
@mrmr4508
17 күн бұрын
Just found this channel and OMG I'm so excited for new vids like this!! Pls pls pls i absolutely need more xD
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@mrmr4508 AHH TYSM FOR THE SUPPORT!! I def plan to do some more vids like this!
@mrmr4508
16 күн бұрын
@@ShmurplesArePurple yayyyyyyy I'm looking forward to it ^^
@BlueBirdFeather1996
16 күн бұрын
I bet Raggedstar is kicking himself
@STARS_SHIMMERS
17 күн бұрын
GRRRR I LOVE THIS! THIS IS AMAZING AND HAD ME HOOKED FOR ALL OF IT!!!
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@STARS_SHIMMERS OMD TYSMMMMM!!!!💖💖💖
@stormcrest
17 күн бұрын
I read the title as ‘Fixing Yellowfang (Yellowfang) secret rewrite’
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@stormcrest I should've titled it that frfr/j/lh
@WhiteCresentKnight
14 күн бұрын
I always love when fans give the women characters the actual love they deserve, I hate how the Erin’s just treat all the she cats so awfully. One would think a group of all women wouldn’t be so awful to women characters
@palletshad068
17 күн бұрын
This is so good!! So underrated 😢
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@palletshad068 AHH TYSM!💖💖
@Newpop9
20 күн бұрын
Woahhh, this is a long video, I'll watch it when I get home, commenting to boost the algorithm tho
@ShmurplesArePurple
20 күн бұрын
Tysm!
@SaoirseRose887
15 күн бұрын
Mmm I love longfrom warriors content 👹 Amazing rewrite!
@MountainSproutArt
15 күн бұрын
Make sure when you record audio you record in stereo not mono! Voice over audio like this should ideally be balanced in both ears at the same level, but all your audio is in the left channel and its painful to listen to
@LittleLion420
14 күн бұрын
For realll
@ruunea_
17 күн бұрын
ur so underrated İT İS İNSANE DUDE!!KEEP İT UP!
@ShmurplesArePurple
17 күн бұрын
@@ruunea_ AHHHHHH TYSM MAN AND TYSM FOR DOING ALL THOSE DESIGNS UR SUPPORT WAS SO CRUCIAL TYSMMMM
@1Katakana
16 күн бұрын
👏👏
@Brenilla
14 күн бұрын
Psst~ Your Voice over audio is only in the Left Audio Chanel. (IE with Stereo audio your voice is only in the left ear vs in both)
@prcervi
16 күн бұрын
nice work also your voice recording is very much stuck on the left side, i don't know how or why it's doing that but it is
@ShmurplesArePurple
16 күн бұрын
@@prcervi tysm! And that's def weird. I'll work on improving my mic quality for the next video and maybe proof-listen with earbuds since I do all of my editing without earbuds💖
@emberblazethelyriccat1293
8 күн бұрын
I haven’t watched the whole video yet, but I’m so confused on how so many people think that a fox killed the kits in Yellowfang Secret. To me, it clearly read as Brokenstar killed the kits and blamed it on Yellowfang, and Yellowfang mistook the deaths as a fox killing. It was a misunderstanding in universe, not a retcon.
@LittleLion420
14 күн бұрын
Great video but your voice only plays in my left ear buds for some reason 😅 Tried multiple different ones
@Bongo-sb1gs
16 күн бұрын
legend why are u only in my left ear, please rebalance your mic
@ShmurplesArePurple
16 күн бұрын
@@Bongo-sb1gs I know, I know 😭😭/lh/nm. I never listen to my videos with earbuds in so I didn't know it was a problem. I'll make sure that future videos have a better mic 🥲👍
@voidconcept1269
17 күн бұрын
Why does it sound like you’re super far away from your mic? All I can hear is music and barley your voice.
@hawktalon7890
16 күн бұрын
Yeah, I had to turn my volume up quite a bit.
@prcervi
16 күн бұрын
i hear the voice recording pretty well but it's stuck on the left speaker
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