Brilliant, shortcomings not withstanding, Part 2. + please🙏🖖💕❤️🐈⬛
@nealschieberl9601
6 күн бұрын
I wonder, is this created by AI, or a 16 year old? And are you open to constructive criticism? So far this is one of the better stories I have heard. But like another posted, redundancy is irritating. Along with inconsistencies that lead to mental distraction. If there could be open dialogue about the inconsistencies, most of us would love to help smooth them out.
@rogerelzenga4465
5 күн бұрын
100% AI....
@christinacarroll4048
2 күн бұрын
It sounds like a movie script. Old or new I can't decide.
@karlvincentwillett4977
2 күн бұрын
88... I can not wait until the next installment! Please keep writing!
@jonhunter8725
2 күн бұрын
Why in most of these short stories an estimated 98% there is either a Lyra or a lira.
@edwardsdeacon
2 күн бұрын
🤔This should be made into a movie. 👍🏽
@davidwickboldt712
4 күн бұрын
WTH!! No answer to their relationship?
@christinacarroll4048
2 күн бұрын
88, looking forward to an ongoing saga.
@FredrickHillman
4 күн бұрын
I loved this story 88
@aaronhale8602
3 сағат бұрын
Non lethal??? 😂😂😂😂
@JohnHRPieper
6 күн бұрын
😢Good premise, but again needs editing of repetitive phrases and plot devices. But keep working on it. Thanks. 88. What's exceptionally cryptic? And where in the story did you introduce Zax?
@mjcyrano68
10 күн бұрын
This author uses junk drama too often.
@bobnelson4393
8 күн бұрын
I am sorry but I liked this one
@mikeriley4824
6 күн бұрын
Please upload the second part
@Tenright77
8 күн бұрын
Ah, Haven Station....
@nealschieberl9601
6 күн бұрын
I wonder, is this created by AI, or a 16 year old? And are you open to constructive criticism? So far this is one of the better stories I have heard. But like another posted, redundancy is irritating. Along with inconsistencies that lead to mental distraction. If there could be open dialogue about the inconsistencies, most of us would love to help smooth them out. Additionally, wow… the last fifteen minutes are so ridiculous, it just ruined the whole story. Ugh.
@THE1NATEMEISTER
2 күн бұрын
Probably written with AI and not proofread by someone with good literacy skills.
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