الاداء الرائع والتمكن فى الشرح والايضاح حلو مافيش كلام
@IELTSAcademy9
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شكرا لحضرتك🌷
@hammad.altrad8503
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شكرا انسة انسة يسر وبارك الله فيكي المقالة روعة والشرح اروع بس كلماتها جزلة جدا مع ذلك الفايدة كبيرة من كل النواحي ويعطيكي الف عافية
@IELTSAcademy9
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الحمد لله ان حضرتك لاقيته مفيد 🌷🌷بس معلش هي "جزلة" معناها صعبة؟
@elsayedmahmoud3032
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هو يقصد ان الكليمات كبيرة من حيث عدد الحروف ودة بيسبب صعوبه فى حفظ الكليمات ....والله اعلم
@IELTSAcademy9
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@@elsayedmahmoud3032 تمام...هو فعلا فيه بعض الكلمات صعبة وطويلة ولكن للاسف دي صفة من صفات الكلمات الأكاديمية. بس بالتدريب بتبقى واضحة وسلسة.
@ziadtarek5973
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شكرا جدا لحضرتك ربنا يباركلك
@IELTSAcademy9
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@بسمةامل-غ3ك3ز
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الله يوفقج ست يسر . الشرح جميل بس كلماته المقاله صعبة بالحفظ
@IELTSAcademy9
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تدريجي وبالتدريب هتعرفيها وتتعودي عليها... هي كلمات ال essays المفروض مستواها كدة.
@push.official
8 ай бұрын
Undeniably, a substantial number of criminals perpetrate further crimes after taking their first sanction. However, the prison play a significant role in their recidivism by how merciless treatment they get in terms of the psychological aspect and employment in the financial side. This essay will analyze the reasons of why offenders commit more crimes after their first punishment and give some viable solutions for it.
@IELTSAcademy9
8 ай бұрын
The collocation " commit problems" in the thesis statement is incorrect. It is better to say " perpetrate / commit crimes / recidivate".
@push.official
8 ай бұрын
thanks I really don't know how I write it that way (problem here make no sense @@IELTSAcademy9
@push.official
8 ай бұрын
Firstly, the treatment criminals get in the prison have a major impact of how their case would be after they are released. In other word, the brutal way of dealing with them and the exposure to domestic violence will effect their behavior afterward. Consequently, they return to committing the same crime as being in the jail does not necessarily rectify someone's conduct. secondly, It is well-knowing that if a person gets arrested will be terminated, the struggle of finding a new occupation, and the no longer able to support their family or even themselves lead them have no choice unless go back to illegal action regardless of the consequences.
@IELTSAcademy9
8 ай бұрын
Good; however, avoid referring to a word as "he" only.
@push.official
8 ай бұрын
it is well-knowing that if an individual get arrested spontaneously will get fire from his position@@IELTSAcademy9
@IELTSAcademy9
8 ай бұрын
@@push.official No. Do not use "he" to refer to a criminal or individual. You can say " it is well-known that if a person gets arrested (he or she) will be terminated.
@dr.biochimistry6619
5 ай бұрын
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@IELTSAcademy9
5 ай бұрын
بالتوفيق دائما 🌹🌹
@IlhamMansur-nq7xy
2 ай бұрын
To begin with, firstly, plentiful offenders suffer from psychological problems which raised from the horrible environment and circumstances they lived in. Although they are punished, they are not cured from their psychological problems. Additionally, when those criminals became free, they struggle from employment and finding suitable occupation with fair salary to support themselves and their families.
@IELTSAcademy9
2 ай бұрын
- Don't use two linking words with the same meaning after each other " to begin with , firstly" - offenders "who" not "which" as who is used with people. It is also ok to use "that" as it replaces both who and which. - Use the present simple tense as you are talking about a general matter or stating a fact. Say "become" free not "became."
@IlhamMansur-nq7xy
2 ай бұрын
However, several criminals served their penalty, it is shown that they perpetrate more illegal actions after their first imprisonment. It is shown that numerous offenders become engaged into more crimes for psychological and financial issues. This essay will illustrate the reasons and recommended solutions to handle this problem.
@IELTSAcademy9
2 ай бұрын
Don't begin with however as it means but. You can use "Although / Even though / Despite the fact that..."
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