This is great! Exploring the values of writing clearly, brings more experience to a writer's world. Thanks.
@jay-arthepianist6756
3 жыл бұрын
Wow! I love your simple but concise explanation.
@sezdmizz5197
6 жыл бұрын
For the second sample: Before distributing resources within the community their needs must be analyzed thoroughly.
@jollyholly2851
3 жыл бұрын
Some more room to cut words here: Distribution of available department resources depends on the readiness of managers. (Is "available" needed here? Don't resources need to be available, in the first place, for distribution?) Also, probably a leaner/smoother version: Several studies have shown that soft skills affect the success of family science students in their communities. Yet the students, despite having the opportunities to grow soft skills, do not do these educational programs.
@stone0338
7 жыл бұрын
I have 2 better ways to revise the 2nd example sentence. 1. Needs must be thoroughly analyzed before distributing resources to the community. 2. We must thoroughly analyze the needs before distributing resources to the community.
@jollyholly2851
3 жыл бұрын
Before distributing resources within the community, a needs analysis is necessary.
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