You could also insert the description into the action. Instead of just saying that the beast has sharp teeth, you can write something like: "As i take a step back, the beast growls and bares its sharp teeth." I really like this series about fear btw. Would you consider making an episode about the point of view of a character who's hiding from a very close danger, with no way to run?
@JoeWebb-TheStoryteller
3 жыл бұрын
Ooh I like that idea! The next episode might come in handy for that, let me know if it’s what you’re looking for and if not exactly then I’ll work on another 😁
@Sahilsharma-ce4ow
3 жыл бұрын
There was something about this voyage that right from the first day I have been on this ship, every single night I woke up at the very same time, it was 2:19 AM. Like every day, I saw all the crew members sleeping nicely which somehow was not in my luck. Anyway, I walked up to the toilet, thinking that it was the last day of the ship moving forward into the sea and from tomorrow we would have broken up the old taboo that no ship nor any crew member ever returned alive from this part of the sea. 'Not tomorrow it was today, just the Sun has to wake up' I thought as my body relaxed the pressure. Through the ventilators were coming soft sea breezes entering my nasals, but, as I was washing my hands, I noticed that unlike any normal day on the sea, there were no burbles audible. The sea was dead silent! I knew I would have no sleep, so just to feed my curiosity and watch the Sun rise above the horizon killing away the darkness bit by bit, I walked up the staircase to the top deck. For a moment I thought I achieved Nirvana, so peaceful and quite was everything around. The silent sea, the silent air, the silent mind, but when something gets so Silent it gets a little scarier too, we would probably agree on this universally! I walked up to the other side of the deck as I scarcely felt that I felt some movement. With all my arms perfectly relaxed on the railings, I watched the silent sea and my doubt settling down. But suddenly I rubbed my eyes, if was merely dreaming. At a quite distance of hundred metres from the ship, I felt as a bright blood red bulb was lighten under the sea. Slowly, it was rising up, I didn't know what it was but it really was there. Suddenly from the heart of the dead silent sea, a mighty head broke up and I almost did bite my tongue seeing it. The red bulb were his eyes! One of his eyes was almost as large as my one hand and it's large sharp teeth was twice as big as me myself! It had no lips but I know it smiled. Smiled upon the endless human stupidity, which again to prove its valor to some other stupid had come for his dinner. I remembered few verses from the holy books and recited a line of it but I knew it wasn't going to help, so I stopped. I opened up my locket and kissed the picture of my wife and I knew that was for the last time. Only then I realised that I was sweating profusely. I had a gun in my pocket, and I shooted two bullets of it to the mystical creature but it just made his silent approach a visible death. The gun had more one bullet, I knew the creature won't die of it but I could! I thought it would anyhow be better to die slowly when the creature would tear me apart limb by limb. But I could not commit suicide, so I dropped the gun. It was almost there. 'Water water everywhere, not a drop to drink' was never this real to me. For a moment I thought to run to my crew members but that was too late for it. The creature with both his limbs had got the hold of the ship and his face as large as the whole deck was just above me like a sky. I picked up the again. I showed it to the creature and said, 'Go back, Go back or else I will shoot.' It did the obvious. The next moment I had the gun in my mouth, but my eyes just then fell upon a petrol tanker kept just close to my leg. Anyhow the creature would kill all the crew members and many such crews coming in future. I had my plan. The gun I pointed towards the petrol tanker and as its tooth was just upon my head I pressed the trigger, killing all the silence of the sea with a devastating blast. All the crew members died, but so did the creature!
@15Heropoints
2 жыл бұрын
this is so good, wtf why is this almost hidden from everyone
@harleykaruliscreativity7467
3 жыл бұрын
These tips are so integral to writing, thanks for this channel!
@tamimnoory2023
3 жыл бұрын
I love this idea it makes the scene more intense and natural witout makes it daunting in a bad way thank you so much your awesome!
@JoeWebb-TheStoryteller
3 жыл бұрын
Thank you, you're awesome too! :D
@tamimnoory2023
3 жыл бұрын
@@JoeWebb-TheStoryteller your videos really inspire me in writing my stories just keep shining dear.
@oyuncanavar2579
3 жыл бұрын
Show, don't tell.
@theautisticartist9370
2 жыл бұрын
Writing is funny, and that’s why I love it. I was writing a ‘generic princess escapes the tower’ kinda situation, and then the scene started shifting into horror??? So now I’m here because I can’t write horror, but I’m a slave to the whims of this story. Keep up the good work 👍
@MistaManlyGuy
3 жыл бұрын
Wish you would be my therapist. You really know what you're talking about 😂
@blueskybeats7070
3 жыл бұрын
The light got brighter and brighter and suddenly vanished. The captain was puzzled thinking what it was when he heard footsteps coming on left side the deck. He called his friend Cardin but he didn’t replied. He felt something wrong and shouted, ”get up everyone, we are having some threat on ship”. No one replied. He got more nervous and took the stairs which lead him to lower deck where the entire crew was sleeping. The lantern on lower deck was blown off. He lit his lighter and saw the crew was not there. He saw Cardin bleeding to death. He went to him and asked what happened. “It ca...came”, replied Cardin, suffering from tremendous pain. Captain took first aid lying near him but it was too late. Captain mustered up courage and took his double barrel shotgun from chest. He again heard footsteps from upper deck and started to climb up the stairs. His spine was chilling down as he was moving up. Suddenly he saw blood flowing down the stairs from top. He tried to remain calm and kept moving. He peeped out when he reached the top and saw a girl with icy blue eyes, staring him straight. Her ears were shining bright in the dark of a full moon night. He quickly took fired two rounds with his shotgun and pellets went through her. But She kept laughing and staring at him. He tried to reload his gun but before he could, she came and fulfilled her thirst for blood The end. Pls tell how is it?
@JoeWebb-TheStoryteller
3 жыл бұрын
Ooh, great story! Keep it up! :D
@jorje0068
Жыл бұрын
Love this. Thanks!
@BunnyLang
2 жыл бұрын
I just did your assignment. How helpful to do this in real time (mine at the moment) and practice what you have taught me. Particularly, for someone like myself who grows more in an educational/interactive environment. Thank you so very much. This is the first video I have watched from you and I am excited to watch and learn more.
@whitrobinson
2 жыл бұрын
This was very helpful! Thanks, Joe!
@Sahilsharma-ce4ow
3 жыл бұрын
Thanks for this:+)
@time-lapser.4631
2 жыл бұрын
Well Hi Joe, I would like to know would you please make a video on a case study of The Wolf Among Us game-story??? I would like to understand because that story can be very helpful to all of us... So, well I am looking forward to watch this new video. titles:- "" THE WOLF AMONG US "" a game-story case-study...
@time-lapser.4631
2 жыл бұрын
Sooooo, tell us will you do this video or not??? If yes, I cant wait for it.
@lofotenrunes
2 жыл бұрын
Thank you! Writing a horror novel and needed a good tip!
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